Audience Feedback

1. Do you think the magazine appeals to the relevant audience?
2. Were you able to tell what the target group for our film was?
3. Are there are improvements that could be made to the film?
4. Would you recommend this short film to anyone else if it was ever released in cinemas?
5. Would you be able to relate to the issues raised in this film?
6. Does the film flow appropriately or does it look unrealistic?
7. What improvements should be made to the poster and why?

Anna, Olivia and Abigail
These girls felt that the magazine appealed to the audience because of the font style and the colours on the magazine as well and this made it easy for them to work out which target audience the magazine was aimed for. One improvement they suggested to the film would be to change the font for '2 months later' and try to relate it more to the magazine to show the depth and seriousness of the magazine and film. If these recommendations are followed through then they said that they would recommend the film to other people. All three of them said that they cannot personally relate to the film but they can empathise with the characters' situations and are aware of the storyline within the film. They said that they like the flow of the film and it looks realistic and it has a good storyline to go with it and they believe that the poster does also compliment the magazine and the film and no changes should be made.

Nisha, Sharonjit and Neelam
They believed that the magazine did appeal to its target audience of youths and one way they were able to tell who the target group was through the way that the actors were dressed in the magazine article. This group did not think that any changes should have been made to magazine article and by watching the contents of the film, they said that they would recommend our film to people if it was ever released in cinemas. These girls stated, however, they would not be able to relate to the issues raised in the film and could probably be because this genre of film does not include them in it. The film flowed well along that stated that they felt like they knew about what scene would be next and the intensity of that scene. When it came to the poster they said that we should leave it the way it is.

Nayib, Gurdeep and Isaac
These boys said that the magazine is relevant to the film because the setting and the lighting of the magazine links to the film which implies intensity, misery and intensity. They said that through this they were able to tell what genre the film was because of the typical stereotypes associated with the characters and the contents of the film. The sound in the film is something that could be improved as they said that is should be faded in rather than coming in unexpectedly. They would also recommend the film to people if it was ever released in cinemas because they themselves have sort of been able to relate to the contents of the film. Regardless of the minor changes they suggested they do think that the film flows appropriately and another change they suggested was to the poster and they feel that the change should be the font on the title of the poster.

Manisha, Carendeep and Aynsley
They thought that the magazine appealed to its relevant target audience and they were able to tell what the target group for all of the products are. They didn't think that any changes should be made to the film and it would be a film that they would be able to recommend to others if it was released in cinemas. They also felt that they wouldn't be able to personally relate to the issues raised in the film but that others could. They felt that the flow of the film was appropriate and was realistic and was something that relates to current issues in today's society. They also felt that no changes needed to be made to the poster.

Sonia, Qasim and Komal
They also believed that the magazine appealed to its relevant target audience and they were also able to identify the specific target group for the magazine review and the film. They felt that there were no changes that needed to be made to the film and it is something that they would recommend to the right people if it was released in cinemas. They couldn't personally relate to the contents of the film but they could see how others would be able to do so. They felt that the way the film was edited flowed really well and that when it came to the poster there was no changes that needed to be made.

All groups felt that our magazine related to the film and no changes needed to be made to it. A couple of changes were recommended for the poster and the film and if these changes are possible then they will be made and if it improves the current state of the work then these recommendations will be kept.

Song Choices for the Film

These are the different songs that we would like to incorporate into our short film. The different lyrics in these songs all do serve some signifance to the contents of the film. We will fit all of these different songs in according to whatever scene they suit the most. Another reason that we chose these songs is because they are songs that we related to and thought they would also help to explain the contents of the film alongside the storyline.
Skepta - Hold On
Chase & Status ft. Tinie Tempah - (HITZ)
Dappy - Tarzan Freestyle
Maverick Sabre – Let Me Go
Professor Green ft Maverick Sabre - Jungle
Tinie Tempah – Obsession
Tinie Tempah and Emeli Sande

I.O.U Film Script

I.O.U.


Int. George Park Scene - Night

Lewis and Marcus are arguing in the middle of the park.
Marcus throws Lewis up against the basketball cage.

Marcus

You don’t have to do this man, your going to end up getting yourself killed!

Lewis

Hey! You’re meant to have my back with anything Marcus; I’d do anything for you!

Marcus

Well don’t do this for me then!

Lewis

It’s too late for that… Now are you coming or not?

Cut To:
Int. Marcus’s home - Day

A close up shot of Marcus picking up the mail, finds a letter with his name on. Extreme close up of him opening his letter showing his eyes looking at the letter.

Marcus

I got in, I did it. (Shouts) I GOT IN!


Cut To:
Int. Black screen –

Shows the film title

‘‘I.O.U.’’ Soundtrack starts Soundtrack playing – Chase & Status ft. Tinie Tempah (HITZ)

Cut to:

Int. Marcus leaving his home and on his way to college - Day

Soundtrack playing – Chase & Status ft. Tinie Tempah (HITZ)

Quick shots of Marcus walking to the bus stop, getting on the bus and walking into school. The camera will be showing the environment in which Marcus lives, establishing his class and lifestyle. The intro ends with Marcus walking in to his school gates being shown through a long shot

Music fades out
Cut To:

Int. Outside the school gates - Day

Long shot showing Lewis looking a bit mysterious, then he is shown with a close up, to make his identity clear and established as a main character, then in the background of Lewis’s close up Marcus is shown walking up and out of the school. They both notice each other and start talking, Mid-shot

Marcus

Yo! Lew! What’s goin on bro? How come you’re here?

Lewis

Hey man, I just thought id pay you a lil visit; see how my boy is doin. Still at this dump I see, aha!

Marcus

Ah Yeah, dropping out wasn’t an option for me.

Lewis

Yeah well it was the only option for me.

Marcus

Well me staying here has finally paid off! I’m going to America to play Lou! All I have to do is get through the rest of the year! This scholarship is it man! I got the letter this morning

Lewis

That’s great man, I’m happy for you… if I didn’t go you know that would be me right? Aha!

Marcus

Aha! Yeah sure!


But I did come to ask you for something

Marcus

Sure man, what is it?

Lewis

I need you to come on a job with me tonight, 11 meet me at Cage Park.

Marcus

Lou, you know I aint into that stuff…

Lewis

You know I wouldn’t ask unless I had no other choice. You’re the only guy I trust, com’on man

Marcus

Ahhh Okay man, I got you, Cage Park at 10 yeah?

Lewis

Naa 11! I’ll catch you later yeah

Marcus

Cool!
Cut To:

Int. Streets - Day

Soundtrack starts ‘’Dappy-Tarzan Freestyle ‘’

Lewis walking down the road (Fades out) then close up of Marcus’s face. Then Marcus walking in the other direction. Following Marcus’s walking journey to his girlfriends house, showing the distance from his college to hers (Close)


Cut To:

Int. Rebecca’s house- Day

Music fades out as he walks up to knock the door and completely stops when he is let in. They hug and then go and chill out on the couch in the living room.

Rebecca

Hey, what’s going on?

Marcus

Lewis came to my college today and asked for a favor, he needs me to go with him on a deal tonight… I don’t know what to do.

Rebecca

if it’s going to be dangerous then there’s no way you can go! You have too much to lose! Lewis doesn’t! That’s why he does this stuff

Marcus
I know but he’s like a brother to me.


Rebecca

Its your choice Marcus, just please be careful


(Text message from Lewis saying the deal is now at 10pm, not 11)

Marcus

Oh what! Ah, I’ve gotta go Rebecca; I have to meet him earlier. I’ll text you later okay

Rebecca

But you only just got here!

Marcus

I know but I’ve gotta get home before later… I’ll text you tonight, okay.

Soundtrack starts ‘’Maverick Sabre – Let me go’’ Marcus leaves. Rebecca standing at the door watching him walk away)
Cut To:

Int. Streets - Late day

Walking home, (Marcus) lots of extreme close ups showing his facial expressions ‘’Frustrated’’. Kicking the bus stop showing his emotion. Arrives home, throws bag and BALL down, gets in the shower, eats some food (close ups and mid-range shots) puts coat on, walks past his basketball and bag (Use the same shot when putting them down to show he is leaving his ball)

Cut To:

Int. – going to the park – Night

Soundtrack starts ‘‘Professor Green ft Maverick Sabre - Jungle‘’

Series of cuts in action showing his journey to Cage Park. Close up/long range/tracking/pan shots


Cut To:
Int. Cage Park - Night

Close up shot of Lewis, talking to another gang member briefly about the job tonight, in the background we see Marcus walk up behind Lewis. Close up of Marcus saying:

Marcus

Hey man, can I talk to you real quick?

Lewis

Yeah sure, quick though, we have to leave in a minute, for a second I thought you weren’t going to make it! (Laughs)

Marcus

Lou, I’m not going with you man… I can’t let anything jeopardize my chances of going to America.

Lewis

(Turns to other gang member) blood, take this and go wait in the car. (Turns back to Marcus) Marcus, stop being stupid, lets go; I can’t have you being like this now.

Marcus

No, I’m done with this, its not right, you don’t have to do this either! You can do anything you want too! You can go back to…

Lewis

Don’t preach to me man! I aint like you! I can’t do what you do…. Now just do me this one last favor before you leave everything here behind forever and come with me! You owe me, remember?


Marcus

No, forget this, I’m going…

Lewis

(Grabs Marcus) – No you aint (shouts)

(Back to the beginning)

Lewis and Marcus are arguing in the middle of the park.
Marcus throws Lewis up against the basketball cage.

Marcus

You don’t have to do this man, your going to end up getting yourself killed!

Lewis

Hey! You’re meant to have my back with anything Marcus; I’d do anything for you!

Marcus

Well don’t do this for me then!

Lewis

It’s too late for that… Now are you coming or not?

Marcus

‘Pause’… no, bye Lou

Soundtrack starts ‘’Hold on - Skepta‘’


Shot to reverse shot of Marcus walking away and Lewis’s face, then an establishing shot of them two walking away in two different directions. Cuts to black ‘‘Music starts to play’’ ‘’ Dare to dream/Hold on*****’’ Music fades



Int. Marcus’s home - Day


Marcus goes home and the next day while Marcus is packing his suitcase he gets a phone call from Lewis (Extreme close-up showing ‘Lewis’s’ name and picture on the phone screen, shot and reverse shots showing Marcus trying to make up his mind if he should answer or not. Cuts black, then Marcus saying ‘Hello?’


Soundtrack starts ‘’Hold on - Skepta‘’

END

Magazine Review Build Up

This is the final version of the magazine review page. Looking back on the other designs this seems to look more appropriate than previously. This title looked a lot better than the one from before and this final piece is definitely something that we are happy with and have the intention of sticking with. The black background helps the numbers at the bottom stand out more.

This magazine review has been changed again. I have removed the image and text in the top left corner of the page and have now replaced it with a paragraph of text and looking at its current state it suits the magazine better. The title is the only issue at the moment but once that has been worked out then it will be placed at the top of the page like before. The previous magazine review page looked good but after looking back on the magazine review we decided to choose another article to look at and its design looked easier to work with so we made the appropriate changes to it and once the title is in there then it will look a lot better than it currently does. The main image on the left has been cropped so that there is less head room than there was before as well as the image been brightened a bit which helps to make the image stand out so much more.

This, so far, is the completed version of the magazine review double page. We have tried to follow the conventions that Empire magazine uses and incorporate it in the best way possible. The images have been included and a title and it has been set out accordingly and has given the best possible outcome. Looking at this final version, you can see that the layout has completed changed to what was on there previously and the reason for this is because the image looked better when it was enlarged down the page rather than staying in the top corner of the page. The other small image looked better over the small textbox. The black and white fits with the concept of the film because it represents darkness, struggle and conflict so it was more appropriate.

In this one all of the text is complete with the only thing left to do insert two images. If any of the text needs to be re-positioned then it will be done. So far the work is looking quite good the only issue is the lack of photos so it does make it really difficult to finalise the work without any images.

More text has been added to the magazine review page to make up the article. Once the pictures have been taken then this will make it way easier to put align the text better. It is difficult getting the photographs but once they have been taken then it shouldn't be a problem to complete the rest of the work.

Looking at this version of the magazine review you can see that the relevant changes have been made to it. More text has been added to the page and on the left you can see that the text has been moved up to make more space for writing to go there and if it has to be changed again then these changes will be made.

On this version of the magazine double page spread, there have been changes made to where things are going to be. Looking back at the magazine review of Avatar from Empire magazine, the change in design seemed appropriate because even though the film is not the same genre as ours the layout of the magazine and the concepts it follows is what we can work with to help us. On this version we have also changed the Futura font to Times New Roman and the reason for this is because it was the font that was used in the Empire magazine so it looked better to change our text to match this as well. The different colours on this version of the magazine is just a guideline to help know where the text and the images are going to be placed. The title and the sub-heading have also been removed because they did not seem to fit in with the layout of the film and it also looked quite awkward where it was positioned. There is also a border around the magazine page to include the page numbers, possibly more colour and to make sure that everything fits around the page equally.

This is the newer version of the magazine review double page spread. With this version you can see that it has a title and a sub-heading. The sub-heading says: "Urban Youth - What you sayinnnng!!" and this reaches out to younger audiences because it is to give them the opportunity to express their thoughts and ideas of the film as well as the concepts that they gather from the film. On this version of the magazine review, page numbers have also been included in the bottom corners of the page and the reason for this is to make the magazine review look realistic. The fonts used in this version are: Futura and Transformer. Blue and grey have become the colours that are part of magazine review and so far these do seem to fit the work that has been done so far and if the colours need to be changed then these necessary changes will be made whenever it's best.

This is a further update from the previous mock-up on the magazine that has been made. More text has been added to the magazine review but once the images have been taken it will be much easier to put the text into the work because they will fit around the images more.

This is the starting point to the double page magazine review. This is just a rough idea of what content is going to be in the review but any necessary changes are going to made and updated on the blog.

Poster Build Up

This is another update on the poster. The images are quite good but it has been really difficult to put them together with the text and because of this the current version of the poster does not look as good as it should have done. We ran out of time to try and make the poster better than it could have been and the thing we realised is that when the image and the text were separate they both looked really gooid but once they were put together it didn't look as good as we had visioned so that is also something that made it really difficult with the making of the poster. From the feedback we received from the audience, we decided that it was more than likely that we would keep this poster because they actually liked the design we came up with.

This next version of the poster has changed from the previous one because the first one had an image of Jason's silhouette rather than his actual picture on there and it is an improvement this time around because by having the actor's actual face on there is showing the audience that he is the main factor of the film and what the film is based on. This version of the poster is not so good because the image we have is not perfect for the idea we had but we are going to take more images and work around them as best as we can.

This first image is part of the idea that we had for the poster. The images that we have for the poster do not look as good as well had anticipated so we are looking to take more photos and see how they can be incorporated into the poster. The decision to do the poster landscape came because the Shank and Kidulthood posters that we looked at were both landscape. This first image represents the idea that we have for the title of the film. All of the text that is on this paper is the text that we would like to put on the poster but we have to make sure that we have the right photograph to place there and from there we should be able to work with the rest of it. It looks quite effective having the silhouette of Jason's character (Lewis) in the poster rather than the letter 'I' as it makes the audience really think about the seriousness of the storyline.

Poster Mock Up

As our initial ideas with the main image will not be possible we have decided to make the relevant changes to the mock up as well as the poster.

This mock up shows the relevant name and scene changes that have had to be made to the film. It identifies to the audience the ideas and concepts that we intend to use and follow throughout the production of the film. There is also another film magazine review that we looked at for inspiration so the poster can reflect the magazine ideas but the other two films are the actual poster ideas.

We have taken the main idea of our poster from the film Adulthood and Shank. We have decided to take the image for the poster in a park with the three main characters but making sure that the two boys are being highlighted more than the girl. The colour scheme of the magazine will compliment the clothing of the characters so when we have worked out what the characters are going to be wearing then we can work on the colours for the posters there. If any changes need to be made to the design of the poster then they will be included on here and explained. The image for the poster has not been taken so this mock up is a rough idea of where everything is but when it comes to actually constructing the poster then we can see if we need to make any changes to the mock up and then we can make them.

As Adulthood is the main inspiration for our movie we are looking to make our poster look similar to that but it will obviously have our own twist on there with the images we took. When it comes to the images on our poster, we would hopefully like to take them mid-afternoon going towards the evening to make the audience see how we are trying to put in this element of mischief and trouble with it. The poster really needs to help play on the idea of dreams and obstacles that the individual will face both personally and morally and if there are any solutions to overcome these obstacles.